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-Shadowalker-™
Admiral
Galactic Navy
Joined: September 23, 2007
Posts: 709
From: Shadows
|  Posted: 2013-08-11 21:05
I got the urge to write a original fiction story. So I hoped on my computer and just started typing away.
Eventually, I got one chapter of a story finished and posted it on fictionpress. I wanted to get some reviews so I am posting the link here.
It is the first time I have written anything outside of school.... So don't kill me 
But be honet.
Story here
Tell me what you guys think!
EDIT: This has nothing to do with DS, it is all origianl story. And I know have 2 chapters posted.
[ This Message was edited by: -Shadowalker-™ on 2013-08-12 00:49 ]
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Forger of Destiny
Chief Marshal
We Kick Arse
Joined: October 10, 2009
Posts: 826
| Posted: 2013-08-13 04:49
liked the way the dragon is introduced in chapter 1
liking the plot, which i feel properly begins from the 2nd chapter.
hoping to see more 
[ This Message was edited by: Trader of Destiny on 2013-08-16 09:55 ]
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Taelon
Marshal
Joined: December 26, 2011
Posts: 255
| Posted: 2013-08-13 08:14
I like it, adn i like how it does keep it in past tense, i find that people who do that often turn and go back to present tense. The exception of this is ofcourse a falshback.
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