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Darkspace: Repercussions of Evil |
Fattierob
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Joined: April 25, 2003
Posts: 4059
|  Posted: 2008-04-04 16:48
Darkspace: Repercussions of Evil
Enterprise waited. The stars above him blinked and sparked out of the air. There were ICC in the system. He didn't see them, but had expected them now for years. His warnings to admial Halsey were not listenend to and now it was too late. Far too late for now, anyway.
Enterprise was a space ship captain for fourteen years. When he was young he watched the spaceships and he said to dad "I want to be on the ships daddy."
Dad said "No! You will BE KILL BY REBELS"
There was a time when he believed him. Then as he got oldered he stopped. But now in the space base of the UGTO he knew there were rebels.
"This is Halsey" the radio crackered. "You must fight the rebels!"
So Enterprise gotted his picket destroyer and jumped to a system.
"HE GOING TO KILL US" said the ICC ships.
"I will shoot at him" said the escort destroy and he fired the particle cannon. Enterprise spacebared at him and tried to blew him up. But then the engines stopped and they were trapped and not able to kill.
"No! I must kill the ICC!" he shouted
The radio said "No, Enterprise. You are the ICC."
And then Enterprise was a MiRVer.
[ This Message was edited by: Fattierob on 2008-04-13 10:06 ]
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Enterprise
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Joined: May 19, 2002
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From: Hawthorne, Nevada
| Posted: 2008-04-04 17:29
Five stars.
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Sputter{TB}
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Interstellar Cultural Confederation United
Joined: September 22, 2004
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From: Pennsylvania
| Posted: 2008-04-04 18:00
your grammar is pretty bad , but mad props anyway
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GothThug {C?}
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| Posted: 2008-04-04 18:06
i'd like to see you try to write a story that doesnt have many grammar errors 
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$yTHe {C?}
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Sundered Weimeriners
Joined: September 29, 2002
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From: Arlington, VA
| Posted: 2008-04-04 18:13
I love how many people don't know where this comes from.
And then Fattierob was a zombie.
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DMC-13
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Evil Empires Inc.
Joined: February 16, 2008
Posts: 187
From: Huntington Beach, California, USA
| Posted: 2008-04-11 22:16
This story sounds like it came from "The Twillight Zone" because of the twist at the end.
Liked it a lot. Short, sweet and to the point.
Dazed, Maybe Confused
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|Kakashi|
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| Posted: 2008-04-11 22:52
7 stars.
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YIIMM
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From: Barcino, Hispania Tarraconensis
| Posted: 2008-04-13 01:53
Epic.
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